An example of assignment re-writing

Assignment by Chris / Problem Statement

Audience: boss/HR director
Goal: to request for remote/abroad working during the summer

1)During the summer, workload goes down between June & Mid August. Best time to look at the year's success and possible improvement, research new trends, and analysis competition. This process is necessary to get the "big picture", increase creativity and efficiency.

2) Researches are done online and files are accessible remotely so to be physically present in the office is not needed to accomplish this part of work.

3) I am asking for the authorization to work remotely for the month of June, more specifically from Paris, so I can take advantage of cultural offerings there also.

4) Great field research opportunity, counted as personal development that would benefit the company. No costs for the company.

5) I will deliver the results of my research on a weekly basis via email, phone conference and touch base meeting as needed.

Re-writing / re-structured by professor:

* Always think about solution first - which would be your purpose of writing: here the solution is work from Paris during the summer.
* this paragraph/issue could be written into five paragraph, not only a problem statement, but to be extended to an article.
* will need to add a "foreplay" to "make your problem their problem"!

S.Q.: BAM is New York's window on Europe and the world.

D.M.: As BAM has cut back on professional development and salaries, the marketing dept has grown more provincial, unable to leave the NY area for research and development.

Q: How to encourage the professional and personal development aiding BAM's mission?

Stakes: We have the opportunity to enrich our marketing staff at no cost to BAM.

Solution: During the slow summer months, offer employee the ability to work remotely from a culturally rich location.

Argument body:
Evidence: 1) slow summer; 2) maximize culture exposure/ research/ meet colleagues/ read materials; 3) increase productivity
A+R: 1) A: less accountability. R: establish schedule/branch marks
2) A: reasons to provide funds, R: free prof development, cost-neutral.

*Argument+Response: assuming/expecting what kind of question/doubts your audience would have about your claims, and respond to them.